話題：同學(xué)之間

山東省萊蕪市鋼城區(qū)里辛一中九年級(jí)四班 尚夢(mèng)琦

We are glad Li Hua has improved a lot this term. One year ago， he didnt study hard， and often had an argument with others. He dropped litter everywhere and he was very dirty. He even played computer games until 12 oclock at night. So many students didnt like him and far away from him， he felt lonely.

But now， he has changed a lot since our teacher talked with him. For example， he never drops litter， he spends more time protecting school and classenvironment. He gets on well with our classmates. Certainly， he takes part in all kinds of school activities.

I hope it is a new start in his life and he will do better in the future！

指導(dǎo)教師：吳海燕

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