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1.將學生習作根據(jù)中考分值給出成績; 2.在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號;

3.根據(jù)所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由; 4.給學生習作點評〈優(yōu)點與不足〉;

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本期點評名師

于孔春中學高級教師，1976年9月出生，1998年畢業(yè)于山東聊城大學，后一直擔任初中英語的教學工作；從教以來，努力工作，不斷進取，大膽探索教學改革的新路子、新方法，積極參加市縣兩級組織的教學教研活動，取得了優(yōu)異成績；2004年5月被評為梁山縣第六屆優(yōu)秀教育工作者；2010年5月被評為梁山縣教學能手；2014年9月，榮獲濟寧市優(yōu)秀班主任榮譽稱號；先后在國家級、省級報刊上發(fā)表教學論文二十多篇；輔導的學生多次在市縣兩級競賽中獲獎。

The River Is Clean Again

Last summer holiday,I paid a visit for①my friend who lived near the Songjin River. When walking across a bridge,I saw a group of students sitting by the river and drawing pictures.The river was clean with small flowers and grass on all②sides.The air was fresh and many people took walks,talking happily under the trees.

But it used to be a black river and there was a lot of rubbish floating on the water,which gave off a terrible smell.By the end of 2010,the river had been clean and there had been a lot of living things in it.But with the development of industry,the river became dirty.At that time,people there wished the river could be clean again.

Fortunately,in the past two years,the government has paid much attention to the project of cleaning the river and spent a lot of money in③it.Through painstaking effort,the river is now clean again.How nice the clean river is!

We’ll try our best to keep it cleaning④for ever.We hope that everyone will protect water and keep water clean because we only have one earth.

山東梁山揚營中學九年級 李海

1.優(yōu)點:

文章用了前后對比的手段強調了河水由臟變清的過程，結尾處得出結論：我們要珍惜保護水資源，保護我們居住的環(huán)境。文章簡潔明了，層次清楚。

2.需要修改的地方：

①for改為to。pay a visit to...意思是“訪問……；拜訪……”。

②all改為both。all指三者，both指兩者。

③in改為on。spend...on...意思是“在……方面花費……”。

④cleaning改為clean。keep sth.adj.意思是“保持……”。

3.評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標準，本文修改前可得12分。董淑晴?

出生日期：2000年11月12日

愛好：唱歌

座右銘：自信是成功的第一秘訣。

就讀學校班級：江蘇省連云港市羅陽中學初三（5）班

指導老師：王桂馨

I Like Going to School by Bike

I think going to school by bike is good for us.

First of all,riding to school is a wonderful way to exercise and it’s good for our health. Next,it’s fun to ride together with friends every day.What’s more,if we ride bikes,our parents won’t have to drive us to school.There will be fewer cars in the city.Less driving helps to make our city cleaner.I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.But we must be careful while riding.Safety always comes first.劉權基好學

出生日期：2001年12月23日

愛好：唱歌

座右銘：理想是人生的太陽。

就讀學校班級：江蘇省贛榆縣羅陽中學九（1）班

指導老師：陳傳光

My Mother’s Diary

I used to be a naughty boy and my mother used to be angry with me.Now I’d like to say I’ve changed a lot.In fact,that is because of my mother’s diary.

One day I saw my mother’s diary by accident while I was looking for my notebook.I was curious and couldn’t help reading it.In her diary,she showed her deep love for me. She also expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes.She said she loved me so much and she believed I could be a good boy.I couldn’t help crying after reading my mother’s diary.

Since that day,I have changed a lot.I work hard and help with some housework.Now I feel I’ve grown up.