周淑涵

在“我”十六歲那年，爸爸下班以后不再像往常那樣忙里忙外，也不再和“我”們多說一句話。有一天媽媽對“我”們說，爸爸決定和“我”們分開。“我”傷心欲絕，哭著給爸爸寫了一封信。在他離開家的那天，“我”偷偷把信放在他車?yán)铩?/p>

My father was not a sentimental man. I dont remember him ever “oh” or “ah” over something I made as a child. Dont get me wrong; I knew that my dad loved me， but getting all mushy?eyed was not his thing. I learned that he showed me love in other ways. There was one particular time in my life when this became real to me.

I always believed that my parents had a good marriage， but just before I， the youngest of four children， turned sixteen， my belief was sorely tested. My father， who used to share the chores around the house， gradually started becoming despondent. From the time he came home from his job at the factory to the time he went to bed， he hardly spoke a word to my mom or us kids.

The strain on my mom and dads relationship was very evident. However， I was not prepared for the day when Mom sat my siblings and me down and told us that Dad had decided to leave. All that I could think of was that I was going to become a product of a divorced family. It was something I never thought possible， and it grieved me greatly. I kept telling myself that it wasnt going to happen， and went totally numb when I knew my dad was really leaving.

The night before he left， I stayed up in my room for a long time. I cried and wrote a long letter to my dad. I told him how much I loved him and how much I would miss him. I told him that I would always and forever be his Krissie. As I folded my note， I stuck in a picture of me with a saying I had always heard， “Anyone can be a father， but it takes someone special to be a daddy.” Early the next morning， as my dad left our house， I sneaked out to the car and slipped my letter into one of his bags.

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Useful sentence patterns

1. However， I was not preared for the day when Mom sat my sib lings and me down and

told us that Dad had decided to leave.

分析：本句為復(fù)合句。when引導(dǎo)定語從句，從句中的sit sb down意為“讓某人坐下”;定語從句中包含that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句。本句可譯為“然而，我并沒有為那一天的到來做好準(zhǔn)備——媽媽讓我們兄弟姐妹坐下來，然后告訴我們爸爸已經(jīng)決定要離開”。

2. I kept telling myself that it wasnt going to happen， and went totally numb when I knew my dad was really leaving.

分析：本句為復(fù)合句。本句包含that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句以及when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語從句。went totally numb為系表結(jié)構(gòu)，意為“變得完全麻木了”。本句可譯為“我一直告訴自己這不會(huì)發(fā)生的，而當(dāng)我知道爸爸真的要離開的時(shí)候，我變得完全麻木了”。

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閱讀上面的文章，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為 150左右;

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1：

Two weeks went by with hardly a word from my father.

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Paragraph 2：

“Krissie， Dad told me that you wrote him a letter. Can I ask what you wrote to him？”

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寫作導(dǎo)引

一、語篇研讀

讀后續(xù)寫要求續(xù)寫的部分在情節(jié)和邏輯方面與原文高度契合。為此，我們必須在掌握原文大意和敘述意圖的基礎(chǔ)上，分析所給文章的情境模式。

分析記敘文的情境模式，就需要關(guān)注5個(gè)W，即who、what、when、where、why。我們在閱讀時(shí)要把握故事的情節(jié)線，分析故事的起因、開始、發(fā)展，并歸納出故事的主要矛盾，根據(jù)文章中已知的信息，如情感線索、行為線索、時(shí)間線索、空間線索等來推斷將要發(fā)生的事情，合理構(gòu)思續(xù)寫部分的情節(jié)。

二、情節(jié)構(gòu)思

基于原文和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，采用圍繞中心提問的方法，構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)，一般分為四步。

第一步，根據(jù)已給出的文本判斷文章的立意。

文章給出的部分主要記敘的是：“我”一直以為父母婚姻幸福，直到“我”十六歲那年，爸爸下班后不再管家里的事情，也不跟媽媽還有“我”們這些孩子說話，“我”才意識(shí)到父母的關(guān)系出了問題。有一天媽媽對“我”們說，爸爸決定和“我”們分開?！拔摇眰挠^，哭著給爸爸寫了一封很長的信。這表達(dá)了作者對父親深深的不舍，在作者的心里，沒有任何一個(gè)人可以取代父親。

第二步，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段應(yīng)包括什么內(nèi)容。

分析第二段的段首句可知，爸爸告訴了媽媽“我”給他寫了信，媽媽詢問“我”信中寫了什么，所以續(xù)寫第一段要寫爸爸和媽媽在兩周以后見面了，并且進(jìn)行了談話，這樣才能確保續(xù)寫的兩段是相銜接的。

第三步，圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句以及上面的分析進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思：

1. What happened after my father read my letter？

2. What did my father tell my mother？

3. Why did my mother ask me the question about the letter？

第四步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思：

1. How did I reply to my mothers question？

2. What did my mother say about the letter？

3. How did my letter influence my father and mothers relationship？

三、潤色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意情節(jié)連貫，各部分內(nèi)容相銜接：1. 續(xù)寫的兩段與所給短文的銜接;2. 每段的續(xù)寫與續(xù)寫段段首句之間的銜接;3. 續(xù)寫的兩段之間的銜接。同時(shí)要注意語言風(fēng)格的一致和語法、句型以及所用詞的準(zhǔn)確性。比如，刻畫人物形象時(shí)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)男稳菰~使其栩栩如生;描寫人物心理活動(dòng)時(shí)使用一些副詞或介詞短語結(jié)構(gòu)使其細(xì)微深入。