安徽省濉溪縣百善中心學(xué)校八（8）班 趙帥

My English Teacher

安徽省濉溪縣百善中心學(xué)校八（8）班 趙帥

本期點(diǎn)評(píng)名師

姜經(jīng)志 男，中學(xué)英語(yǔ)高級(jí)教師，省級(jí)骨干教師，淮北市優(yōu)秀教師，中國(guó)外語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)研究會(huì)會(huì)員，《學(xué)英語(yǔ)》、《英語(yǔ)周報(bào)》特約編輯。多年來(lái)，在省級(jí)以上報(bào)刊發(fā)表文章800余篇，并有多篇論文獲獎(jiǎng)。曾主編《初中生英語(yǔ)滿分作文大全》、《英語(yǔ)奧林匹克》等，多次輔導(dǎo)學(xué)生在國(guó)家和省級(jí)英語(yǔ)競(jìng)賽中獲獎(jiǎng)。

Hello,everybody!My name is Zhao Shuai.I’m in Baishan Middle School.All of my classmates and I like one of our teachers very much.She is friendly to us.Can you guess who ①is she?Oh,she’s my English teacher—Zhang Juan.We often call her“Miss Zhang”.Now,let me introduce Miss Zhang②for you.

She is neither too tall nor too short.She is thin.She has short hair.She has two big eyes and a small nose.She often wears red clothes.

Miss Zhang is good③to singing.She can also④plays the piano very well.She told us she⑤can play the piano when she was eight years old.

She is very kind to us.In class,she is like our mother.She often reads stories to us in English.From these,we ⑥cann’t only increase our interests in English,but also extend our vocabulary.It is really good for us.

After class she has many things to do.There are always many exercise books on her desk.She has to correct them for us.So our teacher’s daily life is very busy.We learn from her that“No pain,no gains”.But sometimes she plays games with us.

This is our English teacher,a good teacher.We all like her very much.

1.優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

小作者全面地描寫了英語(yǔ)老師的肖像，說(shuō)明了老師的性格特點(diǎn)、敬業(yè)精神，用詞準(zhǔn)確，表達(dá)生動(dòng)，引用老師的座右銘起到了畫龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。

2.需要修改的地方：

①is she應(yīng)改為she is。賓語(yǔ)從句應(yīng)用陳述句語(yǔ)序，即主語(yǔ)在前，謂語(yǔ)在后。

②for應(yīng)改為to?！跋蚰橙私榻B某人”應(yīng)用introduce sb.to sb.，介詞必須用to。

③to應(yīng)改為at。表示“擅長(zhǎng)”應(yīng)用be good at。be good to sb.則表示“對(duì)某人好”的意思。

④plays應(yīng)改為play。can是情態(tài)動(dòng)詞，后面應(yīng)接動(dòng)詞原形。

⑤ can應(yīng)改為could。表示“過(guò)去能……”，應(yīng)用can的過(guò)去式could。

⑥ cann’t應(yīng)改為 can not或 can’t。can not的縮寫應(yīng)該是 can’t。

3.評(píng)分：

按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿分20分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得16分。