郭昊
高考英語(yǔ)短文改錯(cuò)一直是很多考生發(fā)揮極不穩(wěn)定的部分,無(wú)論是之前以“行”為單位設(shè)錯(cuò),還是目前以“篇章”為單位設(shè)錯(cuò)。究其原因,主要是因?yàn)榇蠹也恢搹暮翁幭率郑M(jìn)而無(wú)法有效找到錯(cuò)誤。那么,如何在有限的時(shí)間內(nèi)找出一篇文章中的錯(cuò)誤呢?根據(jù)筆者多年的教學(xué)經(jīng)驗(yàn),要擒“錯(cuò)”,先要擒“謂”。下面我們具體來(lái)看如何通過(guò)擒“謂”來(lái)擒“錯(cuò)”。
擒“謂”,顧名思義,就是從謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞入手,來(lái)看看其本身或與其相關(guān)的成分是否有錯(cuò)。一般來(lái)說(shuō),通過(guò)擒“謂”要找的錯(cuò)誤有兩種:謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤和謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞間接錯(cuò)誤。下面我們分類(lèi)來(lái)看。
所謂謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤,是指錯(cuò)誤直接發(fā)生在謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞身上。一般來(lái)說(shuō),時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤、一致性錯(cuò)誤(包括主謂不一致和并列謂語(yǔ)形式不一致)以及缺少謂語(yǔ)是常見(jiàn)的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤,這些錯(cuò)誤在每年的高考題中都會(huì)出現(xiàn)1~2個(gè),并且都比較簡(jiǎn)單。下面我們來(lái)看幾道歷年的高考真題(需要說(shuō)明的是,有的真題雖然年份比較久遠(yuǎn),但都是這類(lèi)錯(cuò)誤中的經(jīng)典考題,值得大家細(xì)細(xì)研究和體會(huì))。
①They did not want me to do any work at home; they want me to devote all my time to my studies ... (2001年全國(guó)卷)
【觀察】在這兩個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句中,第一句話的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞did not want是一般過(guò)去時(shí),第二句話的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞want是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),兩句主語(yǔ)一致,但謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)不一致。
【修改】本題屬于謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤。由于全文使用的是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),故應(yīng)將第一句中的did改為do。
②One evening she told me that something happened when her parents was out. (2004年福建卷)
【觀察】本句為“一主二從”復(fù)合句,主句的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是told,that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是happened,when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的謂語(yǔ)是was,這三個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞從時(shí)態(tài)角度來(lái)看均無(wú)錯(cuò)。但從主謂一致角度來(lái)看,很明顯時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句中的was和主語(yǔ)her parents是不匹配的。
【修改】本題屬于主謂不一致錯(cuò)誤,由于parents是復(fù)數(shù),所以應(yīng)把was改為were。
③As we climbed the mountain, we fed monkeys, visiting temples and told stories. (2002年全國(guó)卷)
【觀察】本句出現(xiàn)主從復(fù)合句,主句包含fed、visiting、told三個(gè)動(dòng)詞,由句意和并列連詞and可知,三者應(yīng)為并列謂語(yǔ),很明顯visiting與另外兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式不一致。
【修改】本題屬于并列謂語(yǔ)形式不一致錯(cuò)誤,應(yīng)將visiting改為visited。
④There will an important game next month. (2003年安徽卷)
【觀察】本句是there be句型,句中有助動(dòng)詞will,但缺少了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞be。
【修改】本題屬于缺少謂語(yǔ)的情況,應(yīng)在will后加be。
所謂謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞間接錯(cuò)誤,是指錯(cuò)誤發(fā)生在與謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞相關(guān)的其他成分上,比如狀語(yǔ)、表語(yǔ)、賓語(yǔ)等。常見(jiàn)的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞間接錯(cuò)誤包括形容詞與副詞相關(guān)錯(cuò)誤、及物動(dòng)詞與不及物動(dòng)詞所接賓語(yǔ)的錯(cuò)誤、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞運(yùn)用錯(cuò)誤、狀語(yǔ)從句引導(dǎo)詞邏輯錯(cuò)誤、修飾謂語(yǔ)的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)狀語(yǔ)錯(cuò)誤等。我們?cè)谡义e(cuò)的時(shí)候可以把謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞作為主線,順藤摸瓜,提高找錯(cuò)效率。下面我們來(lái)看幾道歷年的高考真題。
①M(fèi)y pronunciation was terribly. (2005年全國(guó)II卷)
【觀察】本句為主系表結(jié)構(gòu),通常容易設(shè)錯(cuò)的地方為系動(dòng)詞的時(shí)態(tài),此處系動(dòng)詞的時(shí)態(tài)沒(méi)有問(wèn)題。當(dāng)系動(dòng)詞沒(méi)有問(wèn)題時(shí)看表語(yǔ),表語(yǔ)通常為名詞和形容詞,而此題表語(yǔ)卻為副詞。
【修改】本題屬于副詞相關(guān)錯(cuò)誤,應(yīng)將副詞terribly改為形容詞terrible。
②One day I wrote a little story and showed to my teacher. (2003年全國(guó)卷)
【觀察】本句是并列句,含有兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞wrote、showed,且二者均為及物動(dòng)詞。但仔細(xì)觀察可發(fā)現(xiàn)showed后面無(wú)賓語(yǔ)。
【修改】本句屬于及物動(dòng)詞缺少賓語(yǔ)的情況。根據(jù)上文內(nèi)容,要給老師看的是a little story,為避免重復(fù),在showed后添加代詞it即可。
③As you are very popular with us Chinese high school students, we'd like to invite for you to the exhibition. (2008年海南卷)
【觀察】本句主句謂語(yǔ)為would like to invite,其中invite是及物動(dòng)詞,可以直接接賓語(yǔ),不需要加介詞。
【修改】本題屬于及物動(dòng)詞后加了介詞的錯(cuò)誤,應(yīng)將for刪掉。
④Soon I began to enjoy talk to myself on paper as I was learning to express myself in simple English. (2003年全國(guó)卷)
【觀察】本句主句中含有began、enjoy、talk多個(gè)動(dòng)詞,began是過(guò)去式,符合謂語(yǔ)特點(diǎn),enjoy前有不定式to,為非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞,而talk是動(dòng)詞原形,也符合謂語(yǔ)特點(diǎn)。根據(jù)語(yǔ)法規(guī)則,本句中的began和talk只能有一個(gè)是謂語(yǔ)。
【修改】本題屬于非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞運(yùn)用錯(cuò)誤。根據(jù)enjoy后接動(dòng)名詞作賓語(yǔ)的用法,本句應(yīng)把talk改為talking。
下面以2014年新課標(biāo)I卷短文改錯(cuò)題為例來(lái)看如何通過(guò)擒“謂”來(lái)擒“錯(cuò)”。
Nearly five years before, and with the help by our father, my sister and I planted some cherry tomatoes (圣女果) in our back garden. Since then—for all these year—we had been allowing tomatoes to self-seed where they please. As result, the plants are growing somewhere. The fruits are small in size, but juicy and taste. There are so much that we often share them with our neighbors. Although we allow tomato plants to grow in the same place year after year, but we have never had any disease or insect attack problems. We are growing wonderfully tomatoes at no cost!
第一步,閱讀文章各句,定位謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤。閱讀本篇文章,可發(fā)現(xiàn)第二句出現(xiàn)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤。
Since then—for all these year—we had been allowing tomatoes to self-seed where they please.
【解析】本句謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是had been allowing,根據(jù)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)since then可知,本句要用現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時(shí),所以應(yīng)把had改為have。
第二步,閱讀剩余句子,尋找謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞間接錯(cuò)誤。本篇文章中除了第三、五句,剩余句子中都出現(xiàn)了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞間接錯(cuò)誤。下面我們具體來(lái)看。
①Nearly five years before, and with the help by our father, my sister and I planted some cherry tomatoes in our back garden.
【解析】本句謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是planted,句子基本成分沒(méi)有問(wèn)題,然后看修飾planted的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)nearly five years before,由于謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用的是一般過(guò)去時(shí),所以此處要用ago,不能用before,before常與完成時(shí)連用。
②The fruits are small in size, but juicy and taste.
【解析】本句是主系表結(jié)構(gòu),句子主語(yǔ)和系動(dòng)詞都沒(méi)有問(wèn)題,然后看表語(yǔ),表語(yǔ)描述的是水果的大小、味道等,在此應(yīng)用形容詞,三個(gè)詞語(yǔ)small、juicy、taste中只有taste不是形容詞,所以應(yīng)把taste改為形容詞tasty。
③Although we allow tomato plants to grow in the same place year after year, but we have never had any disease or insect attack problems.
【解析】逗號(hào)前后的兩個(gè)句子都有謂語(yǔ),且去掉句首的連詞后都是完整的句子。此時(shí),要么加從屬連詞構(gòu)成從句,要么加并列連詞構(gòu)成復(fù)合句,句子才符合語(yǔ)法規(guī)則。而該句既有從屬連詞although,又有并列連詞but,使得句子一半像復(fù)合句,一半像并列句。故本句應(yīng)去掉but,或?qū)ut改為yet,形成語(yǔ)意上的轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系。許多同學(xué)只知道although和but不可連用,卻不知其所以然,希望上述解釋可以讓大家徹底理解其中緣由。
④We are growing wonderfully tomatoes at no cost!
【解析】本句謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是are growing,wonderfully看似作狀語(yǔ)修飾謂語(yǔ),而實(shí)則是作定語(yǔ)修飾tomatoes,故應(yīng)把副詞wonderfully改為其形容詞形式wonderful。
第三步,閱讀全文,尋找其他錯(cuò)誤。除了上述謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤和間接錯(cuò)誤,剩下的錯(cuò)誤??疾榈氖墙樵~搭配錯(cuò)誤(比如with the help by中的by應(yīng)改為of)、名詞單復(fù)數(shù)錯(cuò)誤(比如for all these year中的year應(yīng)改為years)、冠詞的固定搭配錯(cuò)誤(比如As result應(yīng)改為As a result)、語(yǔ)言邏輯錯(cuò)誤(比如growing somewhere應(yīng)改為growing everywhere)、形容詞用法錯(cuò)誤(so much中的much改為many)等。這類(lèi)錯(cuò)誤通常比較明顯,只要大家有扎實(shí)的基礎(chǔ),做題時(shí)細(xì)致一些,全部找出來(lái)應(yīng)該不成問(wèn)題。
綜上來(lái)看,要高效擒“錯(cuò)”,抓住謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是關(guān)鍵。希望這樣的解題思路能大大提高同學(xué)們做短文改錯(cuò)的效率,最終輕松攻克短文改錯(cuò)。
In the Southeast Asian country of Thailand (formerly called Siam), it was a national tradition to present the emperor with any white elephant that was captured. These rare elephants were sacred (神圣的) to the emperor. It was commonly believed that if the emperor became dissatisfied with one of his nobles, he would order a white elephant sent to him. Unable to use or destroy the sacred animal, the noble was forced to bear the cost of maintaining the huge beast. In 1629, the emperor of Siam sent King Charles I of England an elephant (records do not say whether it was white). The cost of its maintenance became a great drain (消耗) on the royal treasury. Gradually, the phrase "white elephant" came to designate (指明)possessions that are expensive but useless.
第一步,閱讀文章各句,定位謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤。閱讀本篇文章,可發(fā)現(xiàn)第二句出現(xiàn)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤。
Since then—for all these year—we had been allowing tomatoes to self-seed where they please.
【解析】本句謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是had been allowing,根據(jù)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)since then可知,本句要用現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時(shí),所以應(yīng)把had改為have。
第二步,閱讀剩余句子,尋找謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞間接錯(cuò)誤。本篇文章中除了第三、第五句,剩余句子中都出現(xiàn)了謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞間接錯(cuò)誤。下面我們具體來(lái)看。
①Nearly five years before, and with the help by our father, my sister and I planted some cherry tomatoes in our back garden.
【解析】本句謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是planted,句子基本成分沒(méi)有問(wèn)題,然后看修飾planted的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)nearly five years before,由于謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用的是一般過(guò)去時(shí),所以此處要用ago,不能用before,before常與完成時(shí)連用。
②The fruits are small in size, but juicy and taste.
【解析】本句是主系表結(jié)構(gòu),句子主語(yǔ)和系動(dòng)詞都沒(méi)有問(wèn)題,然后看表語(yǔ),表語(yǔ)描述的是水果的大小、味道等,在此應(yīng)用形容詞,三個(gè)詞語(yǔ)small、juicy、taste中只有taste不是形容詞,所以應(yīng)把taste改為形容詞tasty。
③Although we allow tomato plants to grow in the same place year after year, but we have never had any disease or insect attack problems.
【解析】逗號(hào)前后的兩個(gè)句子都有謂語(yǔ),且去掉句首的連詞后都是完整的句子。此時(shí),要么加從屬連詞構(gòu)成從句,要么加并列連詞構(gòu)成復(fù)合句,句子才符合語(yǔ)法規(guī)則。而該句既有從屬連詞although,又有并列連詞but,使得句子一半像復(fù)合句,一半像并列句。故本句應(yīng)去掉but,或?qū)ut改為yet,形成語(yǔ)意上的轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系。許多同學(xué)只知道although和but不可連用,卻不知其所以然,希望上述解釋可以讓大家徹底理解其中緣由。
④We are growing wonderfully tomatoes at no cost!
【解析】本句謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞是are growing,wonderfully看似作狀語(yǔ)修飾謂語(yǔ),而實(shí)則是作定語(yǔ)修飾tomatoes,故應(yīng)把副詞wonderfully改為其形容詞形式wonderful。
第三步,閱讀全文,尋找其他錯(cuò)誤。除了上述謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞直接錯(cuò)誤和間接錯(cuò)誤,剩下的錯(cuò)誤常考查的是介詞搭配錯(cuò)誤(比如with the help by中的by應(yīng)改為of)、名詞單復(fù)數(shù)錯(cuò)誤(比如for all these year中的year應(yīng)改為years)、冠詞的固定搭配錯(cuò)誤(比如As result應(yīng)改為As a result)、語(yǔ)言邏輯錯(cuò)誤(比如growing somewhere應(yīng)改為growing everywhere)、形容詞用法錯(cuò)誤(so much中的much改為many)等。這類(lèi)錯(cuò)誤通常比較明顯,只要大家有扎實(shí)的基礎(chǔ),做題時(shí)細(xì)致一些,全部找出來(lái)應(yīng)該不成問(wèn)題。