How I Began to Learn English

My name is Zhang Hua.As my parents are both engaged in English study,I showed great interest in English even when I was a very little girl.Whenever my father was reading English,I always sat at the desk listening to him quietly.His reading sounded so interesting to me.Soon they began to teach my①English and I learned quickly and happily.

I studied English even harder after I got a chance to talk with an American.That took place when my father took me to Jinan where I happened to meet an American woman in a park.She insisted on to take②a photo for me.I agreed.Then I said in English,“Thank you very much.”Hearing this she was surprised.She patted me on my③head and asked me,“How old are you?”I told her that I was nine.She held up her thumb and smiled.

After I entered into④the middle school,I learned more and more English.Last year I won the first prize in the English contest of the whole city.This was a newmilestone(里程碑)in the long course of my English study.I will work hard on English.I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.

山東梁山楊營中學九年級（三）班 張華

【欄目要求】

1.將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績; 2.在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號;

3.根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由; 4.給學生習作點評〈優(yōu)點與不足〉;

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本期點評名師

石繼忠男，1989年參加工作，中學高級教師，濟寧市骨干教師，市級教學能手。工作中，立足實際，認真搞好教學，創(chuàng)造性地開展學校的教育教學、教改科研工作，在教育這片田園里勤奮耕耘，積極探索，不斷改進教學手段，吸收先進的教育理念，在多年的英語教學工作中，積累了豐富的教學經驗，形成了自己獨特的教學方法。從教以來一直擔任初中畢業(yè)班的教學工作，在歷年的中考中，所執(zhí)教的班級都取得了優(yōu)異的成績，受到學校和社會各界的一致好評。曾先后在省級、國家級報刊發(fā)表論文一百多篇，現擔任《英語周報》《英語輔導報》《學生英語報》《英語畫刊》《英語園地》等多家報刊的特約編輯。

1.優(yōu)點:

本文結構嚴謹，條理清晰，層次分明，結構合理，過渡自然。

2.需要修改的地方：

①my改為me。teach sb.English意為“教……英語”。

②to take改為taking。insist on后加動名詞，意為“堅持做……”。

③my改為the。習慣上有些動作發(fā)生在身體某個部位時，用the而不用所有格。

④去掉into。enter=come into，不可與into連用。

3.評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標準，本文修改前可得12分。