安徽省合肥市第五十中學(xué)學(xué)生 李泊瑞

【題目要求】

日常生活中，我們難免會遇到一些突發(fā)事件，遇到這些情況時該怎么做呢？請寫一篇以“What to do in an accident”為題的英語短文，要求通過實例談?wù)勀愕目捶ā?/p>

【習(xí)作展示】

What to do in an accident

First aid is very helpful and very necessary,because it can be used whenever or wherever we are in an accident and it can save our lives.

Let's imagine an accident.A boy is lying on the ground.He can't move.He is in pain.What can we do to help him?

First of all,it is a good idea to find out what is wrong with him.The simplest way is to ask him.But he could have trouble in hearing you or speaking to you,so we can shout for help or call the emergency center at 120.

Before help arrives,the most important thing is to make him comfortable.But remember not to lift him up or sit him on a chair.If so,you may drop him and hurt him even more.The right way is to keep him warm.You can cover him with a coat and wait for help to come.

Those are some good suggestions on first aid in an accident.If you follow them,they may help you a lot in an emergency.

【教師點評】

這是一篇介紹“急救”知識的習(xí)作。文章首先點明了“急救”的重要性，然后通過假設(shè)一個男孩遇到事故的場景介紹了最恰當(dāng)?shù)摹凹本取狈椒?，最后總結(jié)全文，呼應(yīng)主題。

文章采取“總—分—總”的寫作方式，中心突出，層次清晰，信息內(nèi)容完整，語言表達(dá)靈活。行文中小作者恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂昧薴irst of all等過渡性詞語和復(fù)合句式，并涉及了多種表示建議的句型：

1.It's a good idea to...

2.The simplest way is to...

3.We/You can...

4.The most important thing is to...

5.Remember not to...

6.The right way is to...

7.If you follow...,...may help...

總之，無論從文章的語句表達(dá)，還是語法的正確使用來看，都能夠凸顯出小作者嫻熟的英語語言功底。

這是一篇不可多得的英語佳作，值得與同學(xué)們分享！