曾江濤

張祖平 男，80后英語教師，就職于浙江省紹興市樹人中學(xué)，愛好閱讀、翻譯和寫作。在英語教學(xué)中，注重分層教學(xué)，尤其善于激勵英語薄弱的學(xué)生，用他們的興趣愛好，引導(dǎo)他們進(jìn)行愉快閱讀。自主研發(fā)的“E飛英語口語考試小程序”榮獲2018年紹興市教師自制教具比賽一等獎。

I have a new friend this term. Hes① name is Mike. His father is from US②， and his mother is from China. So he can speak Chinese and English. He really likes playing basketball. And he wants to join the basketball club. His favorite animal is panda③ because he thinks theyre very cute. His home is about two kilometers away from the school， so he rides his bike to the school. It takes him about ten minutes. Now is 3 p.m. on Thursday afternoon④.

What is Mike doing now？ He is reading in the school library with his classmates. Do you want to be his friend？

點評

1. 優(yōu)點：

本文緊扣要點，語言簡潔，動詞詞組的使用比較準(zhǔn)確，如like doing結(jié)構(gòu)，want to do等結(jié)構(gòu)。一般現(xiàn)在時和現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行的使用也沒有出現(xiàn)錯誤。此外，小作者還能使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞，如and，so，because等，使行文更連貫。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①Hes改為His。Hes是He is的縮寫，此處要表達(dá)他的名字，所以應(yīng)該用His name。

②the。美國的全稱是the United States of America，可以縮寫為the USA或者the US，the不要漏掉。

③此處應(yīng)該改為animals are pandas。這樣與后文的代詞they保持行文一致。

④此句建議改為：It is Thursday today and it is 3：00 in the afternoon.寫這種句子要遵循英語的語言習(xí)慣，不要采用中式英語的錯誤方式來寫。

3. 評分：

按中考英語作文滿分10分的評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得7分。