胡君祥
萊布生活拮據(jù),他告別家鄉(xiāng)來到大城市謀求出路。在那里他辛勤勞作,一年后他帶上掙的錢回家。在途經(jīng)一小鎮(zhèn)休息時,因擔(dān)心劫匪出沒,他把錢埋在了一個看似廢棄的房子里。不幸的是,錢全被挖走了。他該如何把錢找回來呢?
Many years ago, in the small Polish town of Pinchow, there lived a trader named Leib. He worked hard, but times were bad. He never had enough money to buy presents for his children or a silk dress for his wife, Sonya. Sometimes he couldnt even buy food or wood to burn to keep them warm.
One cold winter day, Leib made an important decision. He would leave home for? Krakow. Maybe he could earn more money there. He gave his wife all the money he had and, with a heavy heart, said good?bye to her and his children.
In Krakow, Leib put all of his energy into his work and had amazing success. After twelve months, he had six hundred zlotys. But every day, he missed his family more. “I cannot go on another day without Sonya and my children,” he said, and decided to go home. He already had enough money to take care of them for a very long time.
On his way home, Leib stopped in the town, Rozka. He was tired and wanted to rest. Fearing there might be robbers in the town, he decided to bury his money before going to the hotel. Near a small wood house that seemed to be deserted, he dug a hole and, looking around to make sure no one saw him, buried his money.
But the house was not deserted. The old man owning it was watching through his window. When Leib left for the hotel, the old man went out and dug it up. Next morning, when Leib went to get his money, it was gone. Looking around sadly, he noticed the nearby house. “Whoever lives in that house must have seen me bury the money,” Leib thought. “But if I accuse him of stealing it, he will call me a liar, so I have to come up with an idea that will make him give me my money back by himself.”
Ⅰ. Difficult phrase in the sentence
But if I accuse him of stealing it, he will call me a liar, so I have to come up with an idea that will make him give me my money back by himself.
譯文:但是如果我指控他偷了錢,他會說我是騙子,所以我得想個辦法讓他把錢還給我。
分析:本句中,accuse sb of doing意為“指控某人做了……”。
Ⅱ. Useful sentence patterns
1. Fearing there might be robbers in the town, he decided to bury his money before going to the hotel.
譯文:由于擔(dān)心鎮(zhèn)上可能有強(qiáng)盜,他決定在去旅館之前把錢埋起來。
分析:本句中的Fearing there might be robbers in the town為現(xiàn)在分詞短語作原因狀語。
2. Whoever lives in that house must have seen me bury the money.
譯文:住在那房子里的人一定看見我埋錢了。
分析:本句中的Whoever lives in that house是whoever引導(dǎo)的主語從句。
閱讀上面的文章,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
注意:
1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好。
Paragraph 1:
Leib went to the house and knocked on the door.
Paragraph 2:
“It would be best to put your newly received money in the same place,” the old man said.
寫作導(dǎo)引
一、語篇研讀
要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給短文之間邏輯連貫、銜接緊密,必須充分理解所給材料的大意,掌握作者想要傳達(dá)的意思。本文是一篇記敘文,文章分析如下:
[要素理清給出的短文 構(gòu)思續(xù)寫短文梗概 構(gòu)思理由 Who Leib, the old man Leib, the old man The title of the article “No greed, no loss” suggests that the old man who stole the money ended up with nothing. What Leib went out to work. On the way home he buried the money he earned from his job in a hole, only to find it had been dug up the next day. Leib used a trick to get the stolen money back and then bought presents for his family to take home, where he was happily reunited with his family. When many years ago, one cold winter day, after twelve months after Leib had the money stolen Where home, Krakow, Rozka, the old mans house the old mans house Why Leib worked hard at home, but times were bad. He feared there might be robbers in the town. If Leib accused the old man of stealing it, the old man would call him a liar. Theme Greed is bad. Use your head when things happen. Greed is bad. Use your head when things happen. ]
二、情節(jié)構(gòu)思
基于原文本和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息并結(jié)合以上閱讀分析,采用圍繞中心提問相關(guān)問題的方法,構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的兩段故事情節(jié),一般分為三步。
第一步,根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段應(yīng)包括什么內(nèi)容。
分析第二段的段首句“老人對萊布說:‘最好把你新收到的錢放在同樣的地方?!笨芍m(xù)寫第一段要寫“萊布為了找回他的錢去向老人討教”,這樣才能確保續(xù)寫的兩段是相銜接的。
第二步,圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句以及上面的分析進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思:
(1)Who answered the door?
(2)What did Leib say to the old man?
(3)What did the old man tell Leib to do?
第三步,圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問構(gòu)思:
(1)What did Leib think of the old mans advice?
(2)Why did the old man tell Leib to put the money in the same place?
(3)What did Leib end up doing?
三、潤色成篇
在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意情節(jié)連貫,各部分內(nèi)容相銜接,即:1. 兩段的續(xù)寫與所給短文的銜接;2. 每段的續(xù)寫與續(xù)寫段首句之間的銜接;3. 續(xù)寫的兩段之間的銜接。同時要注意語言風(fēng)格的一致和語法、句型以及所用詞語的準(zhǔn)確性。比如,刻畫人物形象時運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)男稳菰~;描寫人物心理活動時使用一些動詞或副詞,使其細(xì)微深入。