寂靜的力量

陳麗芳

喬是一位75歲的老爺爺。每年假期，他的孫子、孫女都會(huì)來看他。不幸的是，在這一次的聚會(huì)中，他弄丟了他最珍貴的手表。為此，傷心的喬和他的孫子、孫女開始尋找丟失的手表……

Joe was a 75?year?old man. He lived very happily and formed a beautiful family. His children grew up and moved to different cities in pursuit of a good career and future. He lived in a small village， carrying the memories of his dead wife. Joe had four grandchildren and they used to visit him during their holidays.

It was the vacation time again， and Joe was eagerly waiting for the arrival of his grandchildren. He was preparing his home for the kids， cleaning the home， mowing the garden， rearranging （重新擺放） the household items and buying their favourite foods and dresses. Unfortunately， in the busy arrangements， he lost his favourite watch. The watch was gifted by his dead wife when their first child was born. Joe treasured the watch very much and it became his sole companion after his wifes death.

He didnt realize the watch was missing at first and was happy receiving the kids at home. It was only the next day when he was about to take a bath that he realized the watch was missing. He saw the watch last when he was arranging things in the barn （谷倉(cāng)）. He was shocked and very upset.

His grandchildren asked him why he was so sad and asked him what troubled him. Joe said， “Dear children， I lost the most precious watch in my life. It was gifted by your grandma and I lost it while cleaning the home！ I feel like Im missing my heart.” Joe was in tears and the children promised him that they would search for the watch for him.

One granddaughter asked， “Grandpa， do you remember when you saw the watch last time before it was missing？” Joe replied， “I saw the watch last time when I was cleaning the barn！”

Then， the children decided to search for the watch in the barn. The barn was full of waste materials， books， scraps， broken furniture， etc. The children searched for more than 2 hours but could not find it. Joe was completely shattered （非常驚愕難過的） and asked the children to stop searching as they could not find anything.

One grandson didnt want to give up. He asked， “Grandpa， can the watch work？ Does it make a ‘tick tick’ sound？” Joe nodded in agreement.

Ⅰ. Difficult sentence

He lived in a small village， carrying the memories of his dead wife.

譯文：他生活在一個(gè)小村莊里，心中裝滿了對(duì)亡妻的思念。

分析：非謂語動(dòng)詞carrying的邏輯主語就是句子的主語he，carrying the memories of his dead wife在句中作伴隨狀語。

Ⅱ. Expressions for emotion

He was shocked and very upset. 他感到非常震驚和沮喪。

I feel like Im missing my heart. 我感覺我的心丟了。

Joe was in tears. 喬眼含熱淚。

Joe was completely shattered. 喬完全心碎了。

Ⅲ. Pattern to learn

He was preparing his home for the kids， cleaning the home， mowing the garden， rearranging the household items and buying their favourite foods and dresses. 他正在為孩子們布置家，打掃房子，給花園除草，重新擺放家庭用品，買他們最喜歡的食物和衣服。

【信息提取】本句是一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句，但是它有5個(gè)并列謂語。當(dāng)一個(gè)主語同時(shí)做出一系列的動(dòng)作時(shí)，會(huì)出現(xiàn)多個(gè)謂語動(dòng)詞并列的現(xiàn)象，通常這些并列的謂語動(dòng)詞需要在時(shí)態(tài)上保持一致，謂語動(dòng)詞的重復(fù)部分可以省略，本句中后面的4個(gè)謂語動(dòng)詞都省略了構(gòu)成過去進(jìn)行時(shí)的was。

【句式仿寫】他走到門前，打開門，進(jìn)去了。

閱讀上面的短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

注意：

1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1：

The little boy again moved to the barn， requesting others not to follow him and remain silent.

Paragraph 2：

Joe was surprised and asked how he was able to find it.

寫作導(dǎo)引

一、語篇研讀

要想續(xù)寫內(nèi)容與所給材料內(nèi)容連貫、銜接緊密，必須充分了解所給材料大意。本文是一篇記敘文，文章分析如下：

[Characters Joe， grandchildren Settings When during the vacation time Where in Joes house Plots Beginning It was the vacation time and Joe was preparing for the arrival of his grandchildren. Development In the busy arrangements， Joe lost his favourite watch and the children decided to search for the watch for him. Climax They looked for hours but in vain. But one grandson didnt want to give up and he seemed to have an idea. Ending ? ? ？? ? Theme The power of silence ]

二、情節(jié)構(gòu)思

我們可以基于原文和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)。這一構(gòu)思分為四步。

第一步，根據(jù)已給出的文本推斷續(xù)寫的方向。

文章開頭介紹75歲的喬的老年生活狀況。假期來臨，喬滿心期待他的孫子、孫女的到來。糟糕的是，在忙碌的準(zhǔn)備中喬弄丟了妻子送給他的手表。于是，喬和孩子們開始一起尋找丟失的手表，可找了幾個(gè)小時(shí)還是沒找到。喬的其中一個(gè)孫子似乎有了個(gè)好主意。他將如何幫助爺爺找到手表呢？這就是文章給我們的留白，也是我們續(xù)寫的方向。

第二步，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第一段的首句，我們可以看出這個(gè)小男孩已經(jīng)準(zhǔn)備好重新去谷倉(cāng)找手表，而且特意叮囑其他小伙伴不要跟隨。那么，我們可以從以下幾個(gè)問題入手：

（1）How would other children feel？

（2）Would they follow what he said？

（3）What would he do next to find the watch？

（4）Would he find the watch？

第三步，根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段要寫什么。

根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段段首句中的關(guān)鍵詞find，我們可以非?？隙ǖ赝茰y(cè)出那個(gè)小男孩已經(jīng)找到了丟失的手表。那么，他是如何找到手表的呢？最后，大家又從中領(lǐng)悟到了什么道理呢？同時(shí)，續(xù)寫第二段段首句表達(dá)了喬失而復(fù)得的感受，為了使這兩段銜接自然，我們可以推測(cè)出續(xù)寫第一段末尾應(yīng)該提及小男孩找到了手表。

第四步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進(jìn)行提問：

（1）How would the little boy answer Joes question？

（2）How would Joe feel after hearing the answer？

（3）How can the ending reflect the theme？

三、潤(rùn)色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意“續(xù)”的原則，做到主題、情節(jié)、語言風(fēng)格一致。具體如下：

（1）通過分析，本文的主題是弘揚(yáng)家庭成員之間的愛和寂靜的力量，續(xù)寫時(shí)應(yīng)注意結(jié)局的走向;

（2）續(xù)寫的情節(jié)應(yīng)和前面的開始和發(fā)展吻合，要根據(jù)人物的性格特點(diǎn)進(jìn)行合理的預(yù)測(cè);

（3）前文有情感、動(dòng)作和環(huán)境描寫，且用了并列謂語、非謂語動(dòng)詞作狀語和狀語從句，續(xù)寫時(shí)應(yīng)盡量模仿并運(yùn)用這些語言特色;

（4）續(xù)寫時(shí)注意句子長(zhǎng)短相間，句型豐富和語法、用詞、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)的準(zhǔn)確性。

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