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To love and to be loved is the greatest happiness of existence.When I was a child,my parents always told me a motto,which is “Love is action.” The motto influences me during my whole life.Now as parents,I want to pass it down to my children.Our children had watched both my wife and me do and say “Love is action.” for years,we hoped that they could gradually understand it.
One Sunday morning,we took our 10-year-old daughter,Susan and 6-year-old son,Robbie to the shopping center.As we got there,we saw a big sign that said,“Petting Zoo at the corner”.The kids jumped up happily and asked,“Daddy,Mom,can we go there?”Both my wife and I were just out of work.However,we thought it didn't take so much money.In order to meet their desire,we said,“Of course.” Then I gave them a quarter(25美分)each,leaving only fifty cents in my pocket.They went away hand in hand excitedly.Immediately,we told them that we would go to meet them at the gate of the petting zoo after shopping.
Actually,petting zoos are one of the most popular places for children.A petting zoo is made up of hundreds of little baby animals of all kinds.Kids pay their money and stay in the enclosure pleased with the little animals while their parents are shopping.
Unexpectedly,a few minutes later,as we were shopping,we saw Susan walking along behind us.We were so surprised and asked her what had happened.She responded with a little disappointment,“Well,a ticket to Petting Zoo costs fifty cents.So I decide to give Robbie my quarter,or both of us won't be allowed to go there.”And she murmured the family motto “Love is action.”
Useful sentence patterns
1.Then I gave them a quarter each,leaving only fifty cents in my pocket.
【點石成金】leaving only fifty cents left in my pocket是結(jié)果狀語,意為“留下了50美分在口袋里”。整個句子意為“我給了他們每人25美分,留下了50美分在口袋里”。
2.We were so surprised and asked her what had happened.
【點石成金】what had happened是賓語從句,意為“發(fā)生了什么”。
閱讀上面的文章,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。注意:
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好。
My wife and I looked at each other and smiled.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Susan stood with her hands and chin(下巴)resting on the fence and just watched Robbie playing.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
寫作導(dǎo)引
一、語篇研讀
要素Who原文情境I,my wife,Susan,Robbie續(xù)寫情境 構(gòu)思理由I,my wife,Susan,Robbie What My 10-year-old daughter,Susan and 6-year-old son,Robbie wanted to go to the petting zoo,so I gave them a quarter each.But actually,the money was not enough.As a result,my daughter gave her part to my son.When One Sunday morning We were very satisfied with my daughter's action, as my daughter had understood the motto“Love is action.” The motto was what we said and did for years which should be insisted on.So we went back to the petting zoo.I took out the only fifty cents left in my pocket and gave it to Susan.One Sunday morning What my daughter has done is satisfying.“Love isaction.”is the motto of our family.Where In the shopping center In the shopping center,beside the petting zoo Why In their education,we alwayspassed down the motto“Love is action.”to them.We should letourdaughter know what she had done was right and continue to pass down the motto in our family.
二、情節(jié)構(gòu)思
基于原文和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息,采用圍繞中心提問相關(guān)問題的方法,構(gòu)思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié),這個過程一般分為四步。
第一步,根據(jù)已給出的文本判斷文章的立意。
文章給出的部分主要記敘的是“我和妻子想要傳遞父母給我們的觀念——愛要付諸行動。一次去撫愛式動物園,在錢不夠的情況下,女兒選擇了讓弟弟去玩”。結(jié)合文章第一段,在“我”小的時候,“我”的父母告訴“我”,愛要付諸行動,我們可推斷出本文的立意是“愛”。
第二步,根據(jù)續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段應(yīng)該寫什么內(nèi)容。
分析第二段的段首句,我們可以推斷出續(xù)寫第一段的最后肯定要提到他們一起去了撫愛式動物園。
第三步,圍繞續(xù)寫第一段所給出的段首句以及上面的分析進行提問構(gòu)思:
(1)How did Susan's parents react to Susan's behaviour?
(2)Why did Susan choose to give her money to Robbie?
(3)Where would Susan and her parents go and why?
第四步,圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進行提問構(gòu)思:
(1)What did Robbie say to Susan?
(2)What did Susan's parents do for Susan?
(3)What did Susan and Robbie learn from the experience?