湖南省隆回縣教育局英語教研室 陳博供稿

互動平臺

【欄目要求】

1.將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績；2.在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號；

3.根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由；4.給學生習作點評〈優(yōu)點與不足〉；

5.請點評名師提供簡歷一份，包括：學校、職務、職稱、榮譽、教研教學成果、照片一張。

來稿請寄：430079華中師范大學外國語學院《中學生英語》雜志社收

本期點評名師

姜經志男，中學英語高級教師，省級骨干教師，淮北市優(yōu)秀教師，中國外語學習研究會會員，《學英語》、《英語周報》特約編輯、《中學生英語》兼職編委。多年來，在省級以上報刊發(fā)表文章800余篇，并有多篇論文獲獎。曾主編《初中生英語滿分作文大全》、《英語奧林匹克》、《新目標英語八年級暑假作業(yè)》，參編《高中英語知識點反饋與閱讀》、《初中英語題典大全》、《21世紀英語學習指南》、《初中英語新作文》、《中學生英語水平測試》等10余冊，輔導學生30余人次在國家和省級英語競賽中獲獎。

Walking to School

I think walk①to school is good for us.At first，walking to school is a good way to exercise and it’s good to②health.Next，it’s fun to walk together with friends every day.We can talk about interesting something③and know each other better.What’s more，if we go to school on foot，our parents won’t have to drive us to school.They will have more time to work and relax.More walking and less driving can help make our city much clean④.The streets will be less crowded than before.So I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.

Let’s go to school on foot from now on.

安徽省濉溪縣四鋪中心學校七（3）班胡月琪

1.優(yōu)點：

本文觀點明確，信息全面，立場鮮明。對“步行去上學”的優(yōu)點進行了詳細的闡述，最后提出自己的希望。本文使用了at first，next，what’s more等使得文章層次分明，結構清晰。而if引導的條件狀語從句，使文章句式豐富，富有多樣化。另外，短語的使用體現(xiàn)了作者不凡的語言功底。

2.需要修改的地方：

①walk改為walking。動詞不能做主語，但是動名詞可以做主語，故walk改為walking；

②to改為for。be good to意為“對某人好”，故此處應用be good for；

③interesting something改為something interesting。當形容詞修飾something，anything，nothing，everything等不定代詞時，形容詞必須放在不定代詞的后面；

④clean改為cleaner。much修飾形容詞或副詞的比較級，故此處應將clean改為cleaner。

3.評分：

按中考英語作文滿分20分的標準，本文修改前可得18分。

【欄目要求】

1.將學生習作根據中考分值給出成績；2.在應該修改的地方劃線并標注序號；3.根據所標序號進行修改并說明修改的理由；4.給學生習作點評〈優(yōu)點與不足〉；

5.請點評名師提供簡歷一份，包括：學校、職務、職稱、榮譽、教研教學成果、照片一張。

來稿請寄：430079華中師范大學外國語學院《中學生英語》雜志社收

本期點評名師

于瑩1992年畢業(yè)于山東師范大學，中學高級教師，山東省梁山縣優(yōu)秀教師，獲市級優(yōu)質課一等獎，一直從事初中英語的教學工作，連續(xù)多年在中考中取得優(yōu)異成績。2012年12月在山東省英語競賽中榮獲優(yōu)秀指導教師稱號。先后在《中學生英語》、《山東教育導報》、《現(xiàn)代中學生》、《初中生英語學習》、《英語輔導報》、《英語周報》、《學生導報》、《新課堂》等國家級、省級報刊上發(fā)表教學論文三十多篇。

I Want to Be a Teacher

“You want to be a teacher？ D.n’t be silly.Teachers are poorly paid and they have no power.”My friend was puzzling①when I told her I wanted to be a teacher in the future.I’m not silly and I’ll tell you my reasons.

I’m determined to be a teacher because I have admired teachers very much since I was a little child.They are kind and respectable，like angels.They are learned，helpful and encouraging.I’m determined to be a teacher because teachers can lead us for②success.I’m determined to be a teacher because I can keep young and I can learn，change and grow up with my students.I’m determined to be a teacher because I like the style of teachers—simple but free.The vacations will offer me an opportunity for writing，doing research work and anything I like.

I’ll try my best to be an ideal teacher.Firstly，I’ll study hardly③to increase my knowledge and learn teaching skills.Secondly，I’ll love my students and take proud④in my profession.Thirdly，I’ll trust in them，respect them and understand them.

I believe that teaching is the most honorable job in the world.I’ll take it as my lifelong career.I will never regret my decision.I think my wish will come true. D. you think so？

山東省梁山縣楊營一中初二高成浩

1.優(yōu)點：

本文以反意設問句開頭，突出了主題。本文層次清晰，語言得當，銜接緊湊，說服力強，是一篇值得推薦的學生習作。

2.需要修改的地方：

①puzzling改為puzzled。修飾人時用puzzled，表示“感到疑惑的”；

②for改為to。lead to，固定搭配，表示“引起；導致；通向”；

③hardly改為hard。hard意為“努力地”，hardly意為“幾乎不”；

④proud改為pride。take pride in等同于be proud of，意為“以……自豪”。

3.評分：

按中考英語作文滿分15分的評分標準，本文修改前可得13分。

井子天

出生日期：2002年5月1日

愛好：足球

座右銘：態(tài)度決定高度，習慣成就人生。

就讀學校：江蘇省連云港市新海實驗中學教育集團延安校區(qū)七（12）班

指導老師：陳傳光

My School Life

Hello，everyone！I am in my new school now.My school is very good.And my favorite place in it is the library，because I like reading there.I like the playground，too.I like playing football there.And of course，I like all my lessons.My favorite subject is maths.I live near the school，so I go to school on foot.

I enjoy my school life very much.

董婷

善良

出生日期：2001年10月12日

愛好：畫畫

座右銘：人努力了不一定會成功，但放棄了就一定會失敗。

就讀學校：江蘇省贛榆縣羅陽中學初一（5）班

指導老師：陳傳光

Buying a Computer

Last Sunday my parents and I went to a department store.They wanted to buy me a computer.But I found that all the computers were too expensive.And we didn’t know which one was more suitable.

The shop assistant saw us and came over to help us.At last，my parents spent 6，000 yuan buying a computer.I knew I could do maths homework，draw pictures and surf on the Internet with it.I liked it very much.

寇笑笑

善良

出生日期：2000年12月21日

愛好：跳舞

座右銘：寶劍不磨要生銹，人不學習要落后。

就讀學校：江蘇省贛榆縣羅陽中學初二（2）班

指導老師：陳傳光

My Favorite School Life

My school life has changed a lot since this term.We don’t need to get to school early.We begin our lessons at eight o’clock.

We have four classes in the morning and two ones in the afternoon.After the second class in the morning，we do eye exercise and morning exercise.

School is over after the second class in the afternoon.We can do different kinds of sports. And we don’t have too much homework to do.We have lots of free time.We can do what we like.We can take part in many after-school activities.

In a word，we are happier and healthier than before.

曹嘉偉

陽光

出生日期：2000年2月5日

愛好：足球

座右銘：Where there is a will，there is a way.

有志者，事竟成。

就讀學校：山東省東營市育才學校八（4）班

指導老師：陳金凱

Where There Is a Will，There Is a Way.

“Where there is a will，there is a way.”It is my motto.I believe I can succeed as long as I work hard.

Actually，I didn’t feel confident before，because I had many shortcomings and I didn’t want to make efforts.This made me often screw up a lot of things.At that time I didn’t know how to change myself，so I asked my father about this.He told me，“Where there is a will，there is a way.”It means I should make more efforts than before.

One year ago，our school organized a dictation activity.I thought this was a good chance to change myself.I prepared for it day and night，and I tried my best to do it.Finally，I showed my abilities and I succeeded on that day.From then on，I believed that where there is a will，there is a way.

The Earlier，the Better

When I was thirteen，I went to junior middle school.I didn’t know how to wash clothes at that time.Myparentsneveraskedmetodoany housework at home.My primary school was not a boarding school so I went home after school every weekday.Myparentsalwayssaidthatdoing housework was a waste of time.They asked me to spend my time on schoolwork in order to get good grades and get into a good junior middle school.

It was the first time for me to study in a boarding school.It was also my first time to wash clothes.I put the dirty clothes into a basin and used my right foot to“wash”trousers.I stepped on it again and again.My roommates looked at me strangely.“Why don’t you use your hands？”They asked me.“A foot is better than a hand.”I said to them.The trousers were hung onto the rope，and the dirty water kept dropping.“Why don’t you make it clean？You should wash it three times with water！”You could imagine how embarrassed I was！

When I was in Grade Eight，I could do chores easily.I said to my parents，“You should let me do housework as early as I can.My classmates always laugh at me.My bowl is dirty and my clothes are always not clean enough.”They started to agree me to do housework at home.

Ithinkit’simportantforchildrentodo housework at home.It is good for future life when we need to be independent.Someone like me still don’t know how to wash clothes，either！I want to say，the earlier children learn to be independent，the better it is for their future.

陳文明

出生日期：2000年1月19日

座右銘：真誠給別人，溫暖給自己。

就讀學校：湖南省永州市冷水灘區(qū)竹山橋鎮(zhèn)學校初三（60）班

指導老師：張造云

越早越好

我十三歲那年上了初中。那個時候我還不知道怎么洗衣服。在家里，我的父母從來沒有要求我做過家務。我之前上的小學不是寄宿學校，所以每天放學后就回家。我的父母總是說，做家務活兒是浪費時間。他們要求我把時間放在功課上，為的就是讓我取得好成績，進入一個好中學。

這是我第一次上寄宿學校，也是我第一次洗衣服。我把臟衣服放進洗臉盆，然后用右腳去“洗”褲子。我踩了又踩，室友們都奇怪地看著我?！澳銥槭裁床挥檬窒茨?？”他們問我?！澳_比手好?！蔽覍λ麄冋f。褲子懸掛在繩子上，臟水不停地往下掉?！澳銥槭裁床话阉蓛裟?？你應該用水洗三次！”你可以想象，當時我有多么尷尬！

在我讀八年級的時候，我輕輕松松就做完家務。我對父母說：“你們應該盡早地讓我做家務活兒。我的同學老是嘲笑我。我的碗是臟的，我的衣服總是不夠干凈?！彼麄冮_始同意我在家里做家務。

我認為，對孩子來說，在家做家務很重要。當我們需要獨立的時候，它有利于未來的生活。有人像我一樣，也不知道怎么洗衣服。我想說，孩子們越早學會獨立，對他們的未來越好。

Hotel Transylvania 2《精靈旅社》

湖南省隆回縣教育局英語教研室 陳博供稿

導演（ D.rector）：格恩迪·塔塔科夫斯基（Genndy Tartakovsky）

配音演員（ D.bber）：亞當·桑德勒（Adam Sandler）賽琳娜·戈麥斯（Selena Gomez）史蒂夫·布西密（Steve Buscemi）凱文·詹姆斯（Kevin James）安迪·薩姆伯格（Andy Samberg）梅爾·布魯克斯（Mel Brooks）

類型（Type）：動畫（Animation）/喜?。–omedy）/家庭（Family）

國家/地區(qū)（Country/Region）：美國（USA）

制片公司（Production Company）：索尼影視動畫公司（Sony Pictures Animation）

上映日期（Release Time）：2015年9月25日（September 25th，2015）

Hotel Transylvania is now opened to human guests.Mavis and Johnny have a baby boy named D.nnis who is lack of any vampire2abilities.His grandfather， D.acula worries about it. When Mavis and Johnny go on a visit to Johnny’s parents， D.acula calls his friends to help him put D.nnis through a“monster-in-training”camp.Meanwhile，Vlad arrives at the hotel and to his dissatisfaction3finds out that his grandson is not a pure blood vampire and that Hotel Transylvania now accepts humans.

精靈旅社現(xiàn)在也向人類住客敞開大門。梅菲斯和強尼有了寶貝兒子丹尼斯，但丹尼斯沒有吸血鬼的能力。這點讓他的外公德古拉感到擔憂。趁梅菲斯和強尼拜訪強尼的父母之際，德古拉找來他的朋友來幫助他讓丹尼斯通過“怪獸訓練營”。此時，瓦拉德來到旅社后，卻失望地發(fā)現(xiàn)他的孫子不是純種吸血鬼，而且精靈旅社現(xiàn)在接待人類住客。