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試題展示 假如你是李華，最近你在澳大利亞布里斯班的home stay打算來(lái)中國(guó)旅游并來(lái)看望你，來(lái)之前有些問(wèn)題要咨詢你，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面home stay的電子郵件用英語(yǔ)回一封電子郵件。

Hi Li Hua，

Hope you and your family are well. We have booked a tour to see the sights of China in March. In the travel we plan to fly to Wuhan to see you.How does that sound？ Because we are going to stay in your city for two days， so can you keep us informed of your arrangements about our stay and how can we get to your family from the airport？ By the way， which hotel we had better reserve in your city？

Waiting for your reply！

Steven and Karen

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100字左右；

2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 寫作內(nèi)容不要透露你所在城市的任何信息，推薦酒店為White Swan Hotel；

4. 開(kāi)頭結(jié)尾一給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Hi Steven and Karen，

Im more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and

Looking forward to your coming！

Yours，

Li Hua

審題謀篇

任何題型，審題是關(guān)鍵，審題精準(zhǔn)就把握住了方向，才有得高分的可能。就本題要求而言，同學(xué)們要讀懂并提煉出要點(diǎn)略有難度?？偨Y(jié)其要點(diǎn)如下：

體裁：應(yīng)用文；回復(fù)email。

要點(diǎn)：1. Keep them informed of the arrangements in Wuhan.

2. How to get to Lihuas house from the airport？

3. Which hotel should they reserve？

時(shí)態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，一般將來(lái)時(shí)。

人稱：第一人稱，第二人稱。

我們來(lái)看看兩篇習(xí)作：

習(xí)作1

Hi， Steven and Karen，

I am more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and its my turn to entertain you as a host. Here Id like to inform you of arrangements about your stay.

First of all， dont worry about how to get to my family， I will show up at the airport when your flight lands at Tianhe International Airport. Afterwards， we will take a taxi to the Swan Hotel that I have reserved for you. It is a fabulous hotel that you can relax yourselves. The following day I will show you around Big Wuhan， there are many attractions at I firmly believe you will have a good time， such as yellow Crane tower and East Lake. Furthermore， I will to you take you to some exotic snacks.

Thats all about the arrangements. Do you have any extra opinions？ Looking forward to your coming！

習(xí)作2

Hi， Steven and Karen，

I am more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and it is my privilege to inform you of some concrete arrangements about your stay here.

Thinking of the fact that you have provided me with warm reception and superb treatment in Australia， I will definitely make your stay here as pleasant as possible. On the first day， I will show you around the city， visiting the galleries， museums and other places of interests. To be honest， it is a fabulous chance to have more acquaintance with Chinese culture. The following day， we intend you to climb the mountain with us. Not only can you feast your eyes on the breathtaking scenery， but also you will get relaxed and refreshed. Above all， I strongly recommend White Swan Hotel to you in my city， which offers gorgeous services and convenience in the meanwhile. As for how to get to my neighborhood， I will pick you up at the airport in person and then drive you home to meet my family.

Looking forward to your coming.

Yours，

Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng)

習(xí)作1 這篇習(xí)作結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，基本囊括了題目中的所有要點(diǎn)。文章突出了兩天的安排，闡述得井井有條。從語(yǔ)言使用上看，有些許形容詞、副詞（fabulous，firmly，exotic）用得比較恰當(dāng)，意群間也使用了過(guò)渡詞（first of all，afterwards，furthermore）。但整體來(lái)看句式單一，沒(méi)有靈活運(yùn)用短語(yǔ)、固定句型等。這樣的文章不會(huì)激起評(píng)卷者給高分的欲望。筆者以為四擋中的19分比較合適。

習(xí)作2 結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，層次分明，邏輯緊密，完全完成了題目要求。同樣重點(diǎn)介紹了兩天的具體活動(dòng)安排，但較之習(xí)作1，在語(yǔ)言方面，習(xí)作2明顯優(yōu)勝一籌。大量使用形容詞副詞增強(qiáng)了語(yǔ)言感染力（concrete，superb，fabulous，breathtaking，gorgeous，definitely，strongly）。適當(dāng)使用句型（thinking of the fact that ...；it is my privilege to ...；not only ...，but also ...）、短語(yǔ)和詞組（have more acquaintance with，feast your eyes on，intend you to，in the meanwhile，in person ...）。筆者認(rèn)為打22分合適。遺憾的是本文在高級(jí)句式使用上稍有欠缺。

范文賞析

Hi， Steven and Karen，

I am more than thrilled to know that you are going to be with us for two days and I feel privileged and obliged to plan a fantastic trip for you in appreciation of your hospitality during my stay in Australia. Hoping the concrete arrangements as follows will be of great help.

Upon your arrival in our city， I will pick you up at the airport in person； thus you neednt bother to concern about means of transportations. As for your accommodation， Id like to recommend White Swan Hotel， definitely the best one in our city distinguished for its considerable service and cozy atmosphere with a relatively reasonable price. Most importantly， during the two days， I will show you around to explore our city. On the first day， I advise going sightseeing together to some famous scenic spots， including typical Huanghelou and East Lake. Im sure that our city， a mixture of classical architecture and modern atmosphere is a feast for eyes， bringing you visual delights as well as much acquaintance with its culture. Then on the second day， what about tasting some local foods special to our city together？

Looking forward to your coming！

Yours，

Li Hua