河北省獻縣第二中學九()班 李可可
There are many kinds of sports that I enjoy,such as swimming,running and walking.However,the sport that I like most is playing basketball.
When I was eleven years old,I started to play basketball at school.I was tall enough to joining the school basketball team.The basketball team leader invited me several times to join them.But my parents disagreed with me on the point.They thought it would cost me too much time.Going to a university was what they expected me to.They allowed me to play basketball as a hobby.
Now,I would like to watch basketball games as much as I can.The basketball games have given me the most wonderful time in my life.
教師點評
這是一篇介紹自己喜歡的體育運動的英語習作。全文中心突出,層次清晰,語句流暢。
作者在文章開頭列舉了幾種自己喜歡的體育運動,但最喜歡的運動是籃球。接下來又敘述了自己自小就喜歡籃球,后來為加入學?;@球隊和父母產(chǎn)生了分歧?,F(xiàn)在會盡可能多地看籃球比賽。文中巧妙地運用了一些賓語從句、定語從句等。另外,such as、however、cost、allow、as...as one can等詞語也運用得非常好。
美中不足的是,畫線部分出現(xiàn)了一點錯誤,應改為join;結尾處有點突兀,若加上“How about you?”等句子會顯得更完美一些。