刁靖宇

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姜經(jīng)志 男，中學(xué)英語(yǔ)高級(jí)教師、省級(jí)骨干教師、淮北市優(yōu)秀教師、中國(guó)外語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)研究會(huì)會(huì)員、《學(xué)英語(yǔ)》《英語(yǔ)周報(bào)》《中學(xué)生英語(yǔ)》特約編輯;多年來(lái)，在省級(jí)以上報(bào)刊發(fā)表文章800余篇，并有多篇論文獲獎(jiǎng);曾主編《初中生英語(yǔ)滿(mǎn)分作文大全》《英語(yǔ)奧林匹克》《新目標(biāo)英語(yǔ)八年級(jí)暑假作業(yè)》，參編《高中英語(yǔ)知識(shí)點(diǎn)反饋與閱讀》《初中英語(yǔ)題典大全》《21世紀(jì)英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)指南》《初中英語(yǔ)新作文》《中學(xué)生英語(yǔ)水平測(cè)試》等10余冊(cè);輔導(dǎo)的學(xué)生有30余人次在國(guó)家和省級(jí)英語(yǔ)競(jìng)賽中獲獎(jiǎng)。

Weekends mean that people can have a two-day rest. People can go out to enjoy them① or get together with relatives and friends to talk with each other.

Everyone spends weekends in his own way. In these two days， some people like to relax by listen② to music， reading novels or watching films， others perhaps are more active by playing basketball， skating or dancing. Different people have different ways of relaxing.

I used to spend weekends with my family or my friends. Sometimes my parents took me to visit their old friends. Sometimes I went to the library to study or borrow some books to gain knowledges③. I also went to see various exhibitions to broaden my mind. A trip to the seashore or a mountain resort was my favorite way of spending weekends. Weekends are always enjoyable for me.

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

小作者用了兩個(gè)段落的內(nèi)容來(lái)說(shuō)明人們?nèi)绾芜^(guò)周末，最后一個(gè)段落回顧自己過(guò)周末的方式。文章中心突出，論述充分，語(yǔ)言流暢易懂，語(yǔ)意連貫，表達(dá)的意思完整。小作者成功地運(yùn)用了賓語(yǔ)從句、動(dòng)詞不定式及“used to”結(jié)構(gòu)等，體現(xiàn)了扎實(shí)的語(yǔ)言基本功。

2. 需要修改的地方：

①“them”應(yīng)改為“themselves”?！癳njoy”后接反身代詞，即“enjoy oneself”，意為“玩得開(kāi)心;過(guò)得愉快”。

②“l(fā)isten”應(yīng)改為“l(fā)istening”。“by”是介詞，后接動(dòng)詞時(shí)應(yīng)使用動(dòng)詞的“-ing”形式。

③“knowledges”應(yīng)改為“knowledge”?！発nowledge”為不可數(shù)名詞，沒(méi)有復(fù)數(shù)變化。

3. 評(píng)分：

按中考英語(yǔ)作文滿(mǎn)分25分的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得23分。