廣東 陳麗芳

Joe was a 75?year?old man.He lived very happily and formed a beautiful family.His children grew up and moved to different cities in pursuit of a good career and future.He lived in a small village, carrying the memories of his dead wife.Joe had four grandchil?dren and they used to visit him during their holidays.

It was the vacation time again,and Joe was eagerly waiting for the arrival of his grand?children.He was preparing his home for the kids, cleaning the home, mowing the gar?den, rearranging（重新擺放）the household items and buying their favourite foods and dresses.Unfortunately, in the busy arrangements, he lost his favourite watch.The watch was gifted by his dead wife when their first child was born.Joe treasured the watch very much and it became his sole companion after his wife's death.

He didn't realize the watch was missing at first and was happy receiving the kids at home.It was only the next day when he was about to take a bath that he realized the watch was missing.He saw the watch last when he was arranging things in the barn（谷倉）.He was shocked and very upset.

His grandchildren asked him why he was so sad and asked him what troubled him.Joe said,“Dear children, I lost the most precious watch in my life.It was gifted by your grandma and I lost it while cleaning the home!I feel like I'm missing my heart.”Joe was in tears and the children promised him that they would search for the watch for him.

One granddaughter asked,“Grandpa, do you remember when you saw the watch last time before it was missing?”Joe replied,“I saw the watch last time when I was cleaning the barn!”

Then, the children decided to search for the watch in the barn.The barn was full of waste materials,books,scraps,broken furniture,etc.The children searched for more than 2 hours but could not find it.Joe was completely shattered (非常驚愕難過的)and asked the children to stop searching as they could not find anything.

One grandson didn't want to give up.He asked,“Grandpa, can the watch work? Does it make a‘tick tick’sound?”Joe nodded in agreement.

Language

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Ⅰ.Difficult sentence

He lived in a small village,carrying the memories of his dead wife.

譯文：他生活在一個小村莊里，心中裝滿了對亡妻的思念。

分析：非謂語動詞carrying 的邏輯主語就是句子的主語he，carrying the memories of his dead wife在句中作伴隨狀語。

Ⅱ.Expressions for emotion

He was shocked and very upset.他感到非常震驚和沮喪。

I feel like I'm missing my heart.我感覺我的心丟了。

Joe was in tears.喬眼含熱淚。

Joe was completely shattered.喬完全心碎了。

Ⅲ.Pattern to learn

He was preparing his home for the kids, cleaning the home, mowing the garden, re?arranging the household items and buying their favourite foods and dresses.他正在為孩子們布置家，打掃房子，給花園除草，重新擺放家庭用品，買他們最喜歡的食物和衣服。

【信息提取】本句是一個簡單句，但是它有5 個并列謂語。當一個主語同時做出一系列的動作時，會出現多個謂語動詞并列的現象，通常這些并列的謂語動詞需要在時態(tài)上保持一致，謂語動詞的重復部分可以省略，本句中后面的4個謂語動詞都省略了構成過去進行時的was。

【句式仿寫】他走到門前，打開門，進去了。

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閱讀上面的短文，根據所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。注意：

1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。

Paragraph 1:

The little boy again moved to the barn, requesting others not to follow him and remain silent._____________________________________________________________________

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Paragraph 2:

Joe was surprised and asked how he was able to find it.__________________________

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寫作導引

一、語篇研讀

要想續(xù)寫內容與所給材料內容連貫、銜接緊密，必須充分了解所給材料大意。本文是一篇記敘文，文章分析如下：

Characters______________________________Plots Settings___Theme Joe,grandchildren_________________________________When_______________Where Beginning Development Climax_______________Ending during the vacation time_________________________________________in Joe's house________________________________________________It was the vacation time and Joe was preparing for the arrival of his grandchildren._______________________________________________In the busy arrangements, Joe lost his favourite watch and the children_____________decided to search for the w____________________________________atch_for_him.They looked for hours but in vain.But one grandson didn't want to give_____________up and he seemed to_________________________________________have_an_idea._____?The power of silence____________________________

二、情節(jié)構思

我們可以基于原文和續(xù)寫段落首句提供的信息，構思要續(xù)寫的故事情節(jié)。這一構思分為四步。

第一步，根據已給出的文本推斷續(xù)寫的方向。

文章開頭介紹75 歲的喬的老年生活狀況。假期來臨，喬滿心期待他的孫子、孫女的到來。糟糕的是，在忙碌的準備中喬弄丟了妻子送給他的手表。于是，喬和孩子們開始一起尋找丟失的手表，可找了幾個小時還是沒找到。喬的其中一個孫子似乎有了個好主意。他將如何幫助爺爺找到手表呢？這就是文章給我們的留白，也是我們續(xù)寫的方向。

第二步，根據續(xù)寫第一段的首句，我們可以看出這個小男孩已經準備好重新去谷倉找手表，而且特意叮囑其他小伙伴不要跟隨。那么，我們可以從以下幾個問題入手：

（1）How would other children feel?

（2）Would they follow what he said?

（3）What would he do next to find the watch?

（4）Would he find the watch?

第三步，根據續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句倒推續(xù)寫第一段要寫什么。

根據續(xù)寫第二段段首句中的關鍵詞find，我們可以非常肯定地推測出那個小男孩已經找到了丟失的手表。那么，他是如何找到手表的呢？最后，大家又從中領悟到了什么道理呢？同時，續(xù)寫第二段段首句表達了喬失而復得的感受，為了使這兩段銜接自然，我們可以推測出續(xù)寫第一段末尾應該提及小男孩找到了手表。

第四步，圍繞續(xù)寫第二段所給出的段首句進行提問：

（1）How would the little boy answer Joe's question?

（2）How would Joe feel after hearing the answer?

（3）How can the ending reflect the theme?

三、潤色成篇

在續(xù)寫的過程中要注意“續(xù)”的原則，做到主題、情節(jié)、語言風格一致。具體如下：

（1）通過分析，本文的主題是弘揚家庭成員之間的愛和寂靜的力量，續(xù)寫時應注意結局的走向；

（2）續(xù)寫的情節(jié)應和前面的開始和發(fā)展吻合，要根據人物的性格特點進行合理的預測；

（3）前文有情感、動作和環(huán)境描寫，且用了并列謂語、非謂語動詞作狀語和狀語從句，續(xù)寫時應盡量模仿并運用這些語言特色；

（4）續(xù)寫時注意句子長短相間，句型豐富和語法、用詞、標點符號的準確性。