孫繼艷
【話題解讀】
勞動是我們?nèi)粘I钪械闹匾M成部分。日常勞動包括清潔與衛(wèi)生、整理與收納、烹飪與營養(yǎng)、家用器具使用與維護(hù)四個任務(wù)群。生產(chǎn)勞動包括農(nóng)業(yè)生產(chǎn)勞動、傳統(tǒng)工藝制作、工業(yè)生產(chǎn)勞動、新技術(shù)體驗(yàn)與應(yīng)用四個任務(wù)群。服務(wù)性勞動包括現(xiàn)代服務(wù)業(yè)勞動、公益勞動與志愿服務(wù)兩個任務(wù)群。
日常勞動及勞動教育所選題材均貼近學(xué)生的日常生活,寫的基本都是學(xué)生熟悉的事、學(xué)生身邊的事。利用此話題可以寫人、寫物、寫學(xué)校生活,還可以寫學(xué)習(xí)情況。這樣,我們就可以把此內(nèi)容寫成記敘文、說明文、應(yīng)用文等文體。
【典題例解】
俗話說“勞動是中華民族的美德”。只有培養(yǎng)孩子從小認(rèn)識勞動的價值,養(yǎng)成自食其力、艱苦奮斗的開拓精神,才有益于孩子的健康成長。
同學(xué)們,國家將加強(qiáng)義務(wù)教育階段的勞動教育,為不同學(xué)段制訂了整理與收納、家庭清潔、烹飪等日常生活勞動目標(biāo)。請你以“Housework Makes Me__________”為題,分享你做家務(wù)的經(jīng)歷與感受!
要求:
1. 補(bǔ)全題目Housework Makes Me__________;
2. 文章不少于80詞,開頭已給出,不計入總詞數(shù);
3. 文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的真實(shí)姓名和所在學(xué)校的名稱。
參考要點(diǎn):
1.你做家務(wù)的經(jīng)歷(你常做的家務(wù)、你做過的印象最深刻的家務(wù)__________);
2.你的體會;
3. ……
Hello, everybody! Im Li Lei. Housework makes me______________________________________________________________________
【試題解讀】
本文是一篇材料類開放性命題作文。該文要求我們積極參與勞動教育,養(yǎng)成愛勞動的習(xí)慣,培養(yǎng)勞動技能。以“Housework Makes Me__________”為題寫一篇英語短文。
動筆之前,要注意審題,仔細(xì)研讀所給的提示信息,先根據(jù)所要寫的內(nèi)容情節(jié)將標(biāo)題補(bǔ)充完整,然后確定寫作思路,再謀篇布局去動筆。根據(jù)要求,如果把此文寫成參加勞動教育活動的一次經(jīng)歷,可將體裁確定為記敘文。
依據(jù)本文特點(diǎn),我們可以采用三段式寫法撰寫全文:第一段引出話題;第二段介紹做家務(wù)的經(jīng)歷;第三段表明自己的體會。寫作時要以第一人稱來介紹,時態(tài)綜合使用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時。
注意要點(diǎn)齊全,可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。要保證語言連貫,無語法和拼寫錯誤。
【結(jié)構(gòu)布局】
【標(biāo)準(zhǔn)范文】
Housework Makes Me Happy
Hello, everybody! Im Li Lei. Housework makes me happy. Housework is part of our life. Its necessary to share housework with other family members. Id like to tell you one of my experiences.
Last Mothers Day, I made a special dinner for my mom. It didnt work as well as I thought. I hurt my fingers while cutting carrots, and I forgot to put salt into the dishes. When my mom came back, she was happy to taste them. Then she hugged me and said, “Good girl!”
From this experience, Ive learned that doing housework can not only help me grow up but also bring happiness to my family.
【習(xí)作點(diǎn)評】
本文內(nèi)容充實(shí)、結(jié)構(gòu)完整、語句流暢,語法結(jié)構(gòu)正確,詞匯拼寫無誤,書寫規(guī)范。同時作者明確表達(dá)出了對做家務(wù)的看法,并分享了做家務(wù)給自己帶來了快樂。
作者在行文中使用了很多高級詞匯,如special, experiences, forget to, as well as, not only...but also..., grow up等。另外,文中還使用了一些高級句式,如Its necessary to..., while、when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句,would like to...動詞不定式結(jié)構(gòu)和并列句等不同句式,使語言表達(dá)生動靈活,使文章神采奕奕,為讀者留下了深刻印象。
【即時演練】
勞動教育是青少年全面發(fā)展的重要組成部分。因此,青少年應(yīng)該主動參加各類勞動,如社區(qū)服務(wù)、學(xué)校勞動和日常家務(wù)等。近期,某英語報對中學(xué)生圍繞“勞動讓我成長”這一主題開展了問卷調(diào)查。請你參考問卷內(nèi)容或結(jié)合自身經(jīng)歷,以“Lets Take Part in Labor Activities” 為題,寫一篇不少于80詞的短文。
要求:
1.請列舉2~3項(xiàng)你經(jīng)常參加的勞動;
2.重點(diǎn)談?wù)勀銋⒓觿趧拥氖斋@并提出建議;
3.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)個人信息。
Lets Take Part in Labor Activities
Labor is the source of all happiness. Labor is one of the necessary conditions for students all-round development. And I think it is good to do housework.
Doing chores helps to develop childrens independence and teaches them how to look after themselves. I used to be lazy at home. Seeing this, my mother came up with an idea—I have to earn my pocket money by doing housework. It changed me a lot. For example, when I cant work out a math problem, I prefer to sweep the floor or tidy up my room to clear my mind. Once my mother told me to buy some fruit. I quickly made a list, compared prices and bought fresh fruit. I now have a habit of managing money and I know its great of my mother to look after my family so well!
This is how I learn to do housework—its a skill that lasts a lifetime.
初中生學(xué)習(xí)指導(dǎo)·提升版2023年6期