郭宗祎

There are many seasons in a year. I like spring best， because a years plan starts with spring.

I think spring is the best season of a year. In spring， the weather gets warmer and fields turn green. This is a busy time for the peasants. In sunny and warm weather， I fell happy and relaxed. I often ride a bike； I am fond of listening to light music because music is the salt of our life. I love spring. It is time to plant trees and flowers. Spring makes our cities greener and more beautiful.

Spring brings us hope and happiness. If you want to do something， please get started in spring.

【簡(jiǎn)評(píng)】文章線索明朗，主題突出，緊緊圍繞“我最喜歡的季節(jié)”這一話題進(jìn)行文章開(kāi)頭交待得十分清楚，打動(dòng)人心，具有真情實(shí)感，起到總領(lǐng)全文的作用。小作者以飽滿的激情，描寫(xiě)了最喜歡的季節(jié)——春天。對(duì)于景色的描寫(xiě)，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練而準(zhǔn)確，讀后使人觸景生情。

文章結(jié)尾處集中表達(dá)情感，既照應(yīng)開(kāi)頭又總結(jié)全文。足見(jiàn)小作者的寫(xiě)作功力，做到了首尾連貫，一氣呵成。

指導(dǎo)教師：遇培真