孫銘銳

Some people like spring， because spring is warm. Some people like summer， because in summer people can eat ice-cream. Some people like fall， because its cool in fall. But my favorite season is winter.

Some people say the darkness is too long in winter， but the daylight is too short. But I think it is interesting in winter. In winter we can make snowman， play with snow， ski and eat bingtanghulu. We can spend New Years Day in winter. We put the coin in some dumplings. People are happy to eat this kind of dumplings.

Winter gives us lots of fun. I like winter best. I hope you will like winter， too.

簡評：

本文分為三段，布局清楚；小作者圍繞自己最喜愛的季節(jié)——冬季展開寫作，中心突出；內(nèi)容豐富。文中談到了在餃子里放硬幣的這個(gè)細(xì)節(jié)，體現(xiàn)了中華民族的文化及習(xí)俗；用詞較為準(zhǔn)確，這是一篇比較成功的習(xí)作。

指導(dǎo)教師：孟天賀