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Dear Jackson,
I will be your guide. I advise you to visit the Art Museum. We can go there ①by bus or by subway. Taking a bus is better, we can enjoy the beautiful scenery of this city . You ②like Chinese culture a lot , I think you will enjoy there.
③Chinese paintings are very wonderful. You can see many of them painted by some famous artists this weekend. From them you can learn more about Chinese culture and history. And paper-cutting is another Chinese traditional culture. You can learn how to cut there, cut a fish, a cock, a cat, some flowers, etc. ④Dont you want to go there this weekend ? I cant wait ! What about you ?
I hope you will have fun this weekend. If you want to there, write back soon.
Yours,
Li Ming
?筠簡(jiǎn)評(píng):
這是一封電子郵件,是英語寫作中的一種常見形式,小作者開篇入題,給人一種簡(jiǎn)單明快的感覺,引起讀者的興趣。①處又提出了自己的見解,表達(dá)了小作者出行經(jīng)驗(yàn)豐富。②處又運(yùn)用了like, enjoy 兩個(gè)動(dòng)詞,既體現(xiàn)了作者擅長英語詞匯,又使收信方感到親切,增加了文章的可讀性。③處用了過去分詞,定語從句,表現(xiàn)出了作者英語功底的深厚,增加了文章的亮點(diǎn),④處運(yùn)用否定疑問句,以及I can't wait ! 又一次增加了此文的可讀性。
指導(dǎo)教師:張淑紅