廖凱
What will the future be like? Do you want to know about it? Now let me tell you!
In the future, people will have a lot of robots in their homes. They will help us do many dangerous, difficult or boring jobs. For example, robots will be used to do housework and cook meals and so on. People wont need to go out to the supermarket. Because robots will be able to help us with shopping. And kids wont go to school. They will study at home on computer. What an easy life it is!For this kind of life ,we must try our best to do everything that we should do well. Then we can make our dream come true.
All in all,as long as we can study hard now,I think life in the future will be colorful and wonderful.
簡評:
文章結(jié)構(gòu)合理,采用了“總分總”的三段式結(jié)構(gòu)。學(xué)生發(fā)揮了自己的想象力,并使用了流暢的語言表達(dá)了對未來生活的向往,文筆自然大方、可讀性強(qiáng),是一篇較好的初中生英語習(xí)作。如果能在內(nèi)容上加以充實(shí),想象力再豐富一些效果會更好。
指導(dǎo)教師:李廣東