高翔
一、任務(wù)呈現(xiàn)
你校將要舉辦一次主題為“愛(ài)我校園,爭(zhēng)創(chuàng)文明高中生”的活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)按照以下要點(diǎn)用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿:1.孝敬父母,關(guān)心他人;2.愛(ài)護(hù)環(huán)境,美化校園;3.認(rèn)真學(xué)習(xí),營(yíng)造良好的學(xué)習(xí)氛圍。
要求:1.符合發(fā)言稿的語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn);
2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫;
3.詞數(shù)150左右。
二、任務(wù)分析
1.該書(shū)面表達(dá)任務(wù)是就要點(diǎn)寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿,首先應(yīng)仔細(xì)審題,行文時(shí)不可遺漏要點(diǎn)。
2.發(fā)言稿宜用短句,在論述時(shí),可用排比、對(duì)比等修辭手法來(lái)增強(qiáng)說(shuō)服力和氣勢(shì)。
3.注意發(fā)言稿的語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)和結(jié)構(gòu)特征,如稱謂、話題導(dǎo)入等;恰當(dāng)選用發(fā)言稿的經(jīng)典語(yǔ)句,如It’s mypleasure to.../ I feel it a great honor to...等。
三、學(xué)生習(xí)作
Good morning,everyone!
It’s my pleasure to give you a speech about doingsomething for my school,and it’s believed that everyone of us can make our school more attractive.
First of all,we can do something to make our cam-pus more beautiful. Not only can each of us senior highschool students plant a tree in the school,but also wecan organize a complete cleaning on the campus.
What’s more,we are supposed to protect the facil-ities in our school. Leaving the classroom,we shouldnever forget to turn down① the light and close the door.
Last but not least,we are supposed to respect ourparents and teachers;it’s virtue to respect eldership.
Only in these ways can we turn our school into anattractive place to study and live in.
Thanks for your attention!
四、教師點(diǎn)評(píng)
1.錯(cuò)誤評(píng)析
①根據(jù)語(yǔ)境可知,此句意為“我們決不能忘記關(guān)燈和門”,關(guān)燈應(yīng)當(dāng)用固定短語(yǔ)“turn off”,“turn down”意為“將音量調(diào)低,拒絕”。
2.亮點(diǎn)展示
①作者能緊扣要點(diǎn)框架適當(dāng)?shù)卦黾蛹?xì)節(jié),文中銜接詞語(yǔ),如First of all,what’s move,Last but not least等的使用使文章前后連貫,承接自然。倒裝句,it作形式主語(yǔ)的結(jié)構(gòu)等句式的使用也給文章增色不少。
②文章要點(diǎn)齊全,用詞準(zhǔn)確,論述有理有據(jù),寫(xiě)作層次清楚,時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)正確,語(yǔ)言流暢,符合發(fā)言稿的語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn),較好地完成了寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。
五、英文發(fā)言稿的寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)
1. 熟悉文體特點(diǎn)
英語(yǔ)發(fā)言稿是高考書(shū)面表達(dá)題經(jīng)??疾榈奈捏w,常要求考生以參加演講比賽、針對(duì)某事表達(dá)自己看法和意見(jiàn)等撰寫(xiě),是一種常見(jiàn)的應(yīng)用文體。
2. 掌握格式特征
發(fā)言稿通常由三部分組成,即呼語(yǔ)、正文和結(jié)束語(yǔ),其中開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾格式較固定。一般由 It’s mypleasure to .../ I feel it a great honor to...等引入主題;結(jié)尾用 That’s all .Thank you for listening. /Thanks foryour attention等結(jié)束發(fā)言。
3. 合理安排結(jié)構(gòu)
分三部分寫(xiě)作:第一部分提出本人要談的問(wèn)題及對(duì)問(wèn)題的看法;第二部分為主體,需運(yùn)用各種方法及材料來(lái)論證你的觀點(diǎn),常用到的連接成分有:to beginwith,in addition,finally等;尾段照應(yīng)開(kāi)頭,總結(jié)全文。
4. 恰當(dāng)選用經(jīng)典語(yǔ)句
發(fā)言稿有歡迎辭、演講稿等不同的類型,行文時(shí)需針對(duì)不同的類型選用恰當(dāng)?shù)慕?jīng)典語(yǔ)句。如在羅列觀點(diǎn)時(shí)可用My personal opinions on ... are as follows./Here are my personal opinions on ...等。在歡迎(送)類發(fā)言稿上可用 Let’s give our best regards and respectsto.../ Please take our kind respects to... /Before leaving,I should like to take this opportunity to express my sincere thanks for ...等在宣講類發(fā)言稿中可用 As we allknow.../Only in this way.../ It is my honor to .../Let meexpress my ...to .../ I think ...等。
學(xué)生在寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)發(fā)言稿時(shí),教師應(yīng)該充分發(fā)揮引導(dǎo)作用,指導(dǎo)學(xué)生熟悉發(fā)言稿的文體特點(diǎn)和格式特征,引導(dǎo)學(xué)生合理安排文章結(jié)構(gòu)并恰當(dāng)選擇套句,這樣學(xué)生才能寫(xiě)好英語(yǔ)發(fā)言稿。
(作者單位:江蘇省泰州市田家炳實(shí)驗(yàn)中學(xué))