（浙江紹興國(guó)杰實(shí)驗(yàn)學(xué)校，浙江紹興 312030）

概要寫(xiě)作，是高考改革后的新題型。在應(yīng)試中，筆者非常認(rèn)可2019年高考改卷英語(yǔ)學(xué)科組專(zhuān)家，浙江工業(yè)大學(xué)樓荷英教授的觀點(diǎn)：第一步：理解原文抓要點(diǎn)；第二步：將要點(diǎn)內(nèi)化后組織語(yǔ)言表達(dá)出來(lái)。筆者以為概要寫(xiě)作可分為概要+寫(xiě)作即Summarize+Write，其中Summarize includes two steps：to figure out the style and the structure and to analyze each paragraph。Write also includes two steps：paraphrase and link sentences with connectives。

現(xiàn)以green walls and rooftop gardens這篇文章為例說(shuō)明寫(xiě)作思路：

1 Summarize

1.1 Style

Exposition.（A.Narration B.Argumentation C.Exposition）

Structure：Introduction——Body——Conclusion.

1.2 To analyze each paragraph

using“reap”method to analyze each sentence.

(1)Rethink the logical relationship of sentences；(2)Explore the division of the paragraph；(3)Avoid unnecessary information(details，examples)；(4)Put together the key information.

Para1：(1)With limited space for parks and gardens，architects and city planners often find it challenging to include greenery in neighborhoods in cities.(2)One creative solution is to grow plants on unused areas like walls and rooftops.(3)It’s a popular idea，and now rooftop gardens and green walls have been sprouting up（大量冒出）in cities around the world.

1problem 2solution 3result.

(注：“1”表示本段第一句；“problem”表示本句在本段作用是“提出問(wèn)題”key words：limited space?！?”表示本段第二句；“solution”表示本句在本段作用是“提出解決方案”key words：to grow plants on unused areas like walls and rooftops。“3”表示本段第三句；“result”表示本句在本段作用是“結(jié)果”key words：sprouting up。各句“key words”合并成“key points”，下同。)key points：Because of limited space，rooftop gardens and green walls have been sprouting up.

Para2：(1)There are many benefits of having green spaces to the urban landscape.(2)Adding gardens to rooftops or walls can create a pleasant environment——what was once a gray cement（水泥）wall can become a colorful，blooming garden.(3)The Caxia Forum art gallery in Madrid，Spain，is a famous example——one of its walls is covered with 15，000 plants from over 250 different species.

1，2the topic sentences 3examplekey.

points：There are many benefits.One of them is to create a pleasant environment.

Para3：(1)Using plants to cover walls and rooftops can also keep cities cooler in the summer.(2)Buildings and roads absorb the sun’s heat and hold it，causing a building or neighborhood to stay warmer longer.(3)Plants，on the other hand，provide an enormous amount of shade.(4)There is evidence that growing a roof or wall garden can lower a building’s energy costs.

1the topic sentence 2，3the reason 4the result.

key points：Using plants to cover walls and rooftops can also keep cities cooler in the summer，and lower a building’s energy costs.

Para4： (1)In New York City，public schools plant rooftop gardens that can reduce heating and cooling costs.(2)In addition to saving the school money，teachers and parents love the gardens because of their educational value——it’s a fun and healthy way for their kids to investigate the world around them.(3)“For the children，it’s exciting when you grow something edible（可食用的），”said Lauren Fontana，principal of a New York public school.

1repetition 2the key sentence 3details.

key points：Teachers and parents love the gardens because of their educational value.

Para5：(1) Rooftop gardens and green walls may require a bit more effort to grow and maintain.(2)However，hard work always brings rewards，and with green spaces，the rewards are plentiful.

1，2并列轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系 key points：They require a bit more effort，but bring plentiful rewards.

2 Write

2.1 paraphrase

Tip1：change words and phrases（替換字詞）

Tip2：change the part of speech（改變?cè)~性）

Tip3：change sentence patterns（改變句式）

（1）用主動(dòng)與被動(dòng)互換。（2）which的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。（3）非謂語(yǔ)表達(dá)。（4）并列句。（5）It形式主語(yǔ)或者賓語(yǔ)。（6）狀語(yǔ)從句以及狀語(yǔ)從句的省略。（7）強(qiáng)調(diào)句等特殊句式。

2.2 practice

Para1：Because of limited space，rooftop gardens and green walls have been sprouting up.

(1)_____limited space，rooftop gardens and green walls have_____.（替換字詞）Keys：Due to emerged/appeared/enjoyed popularity

(2)_____(lack)space，the cities have witnessed the popularity of rooftop gardens and green walls.（非謂語(yǔ)表原因）Keys：Lacking in/lacking

Para2：There are many benefits.One of them is to create a pleasant environment.（替換字詞）Key：numerous/many/lots of advantages；offer；provide； foster； agreeable/enjoyable/joyful/delightful surroundings.

Para3：Using plants to cover walls and rooftops can also keep cities cooler in the summer and lower a building’s energy costs.

(1)_____a building’s energy_____.（同義替換）Keys：cut down/decrease/reduce/lessen expense/spending

(2)Using plants to cover walls and rooftops can also_____cities in the summer.（改變?cè)~性）Keys：cool

Para4：Teachers and parents love the gardens because of their educational value.

(1)Teachers and parents_____the gardens for their educational function.（替換字詞）Keys：prefer/like/value

(2)The gardens_____by teachers and parents.（轉(zhuǎn)變語(yǔ)態(tài)）Keys：are valued for their educational function/role

(3)The gardens plays an important role in education，thus_____teachers and parents.(非謂語(yǔ)表結(jié)果)Keys：appealing to

Para5：They require a bit more efforts，but bring plentiful rewards.

(1)They require a bit more efforts，but_____（替換字詞）Keys：produce/create/ensure abundant/many/plenty of benefits

(2)_____(make more efforts)can green gardens produce ample rewards.（only倒裝句）Keys：Only by making more effortscan green gardens produce ample rewards.

2.3 Link sentences with connectives to make a passage

即：常用這幾個(gè)詞匯：

Besides，Additionally，In conclusion.

總之，概要寫(xiě)作的應(yīng)試要點(diǎn)主要是訓(xùn)練學(xué)生兩點(diǎn)：第一點(diǎn)是概括文章主旨大意的能力；第二點(diǎn)是獨(dú)立性，即用自己的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)文章大意的能力。我相信只要我們就這兩點(diǎn)對(duì)學(xué)生進(jìn)行有效訓(xùn)練，學(xué)生概要寫(xiě)作得高分將不再是夢(mèng)。